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Rows of dried corn stalks bend
with the wind that
thirsts for rain
that will only come when it has died
and the ears of corn cease to rattle.

And the thunder's distant laugh
will chase after the snakes  
heading for their mounds on higher ground,
their husks abandoned-
the flash floods may yet pass them by.

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:iconexquisiteoath:
Some very evocative imagery here, I really enjoy the pacing and tone as well.
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:iconjade-pandora:
Thank you, Crispen -- I enjoyed how it came to me as well.
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:iconrlkirkland:
*rlkirkland Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it well, and added to a regular cluster of kudos. :D
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:iconjade-pandora:
Ahh Ron, you make me feel special -- thank you. :hug:
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:iconthe-beastie:
~the-beastie Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is great - really dark and spooky in the personification of thunder, and I love your use of the word 'rattle'. It brings up that haunting idea of a death rattle coupled with the vivid image of the dry corn stalks rattling together. Well done!
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:iconjade-pandora:
:hug: Oh gosh thank you so very much -- you've got it in one!

Btw, it's good to know you're doing well -- it's been sooo long since seeing you around. i love that you were able to drop by my neck of the lit woods! :heart:
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~the-beastie Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like to pop in from time to time! so nice to see that old faces from my more active days are still around :)
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:iconrlkirkland:
*rlkirkland Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So many of your pieces ache with deep unspoken longings. :heart:
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