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Coming up from Aswan with his catch,
he tacks the course of his dhow
along the Nile of her dark eyes,
her long hair,
the narcotic of blue water lilies,

her lotus pose facing both
the rising, and the setting sun,

the young fisherman begs to know
as he sings upward with his might
and his desire, into the sail
that catches the crosswind--

What is your name, scented one,
in the smoke that rises
from the shores of the cataracts,
where I bring to you my bounty!

He peers into the azure above,
waiting for her answer to fill his sail,
calling out once more as his teeth gleam--
Ma huwa 'ismuki?
الأزرق لوتس blue lotus
Ma huwa 'ismuki? = What is your name? (f)

:bulletblue:The second of two entries submitted for the #Word-Smiths's Colors Poetry Contest scarlettletters.deviantart.com…

:bulletred:10/8/12: added a beautiful preview piece with the help and skill of `RetroZombie Thank you so much, John!
:bulletorange: And the image used as the preview piece is thanks to "blue lotus" by *moa810

:bulletpurple:2/27/13: Featured here:
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:bulletgreen: 7/25/13: Featured here:
Let's Talk Writing: Issue 19Let's Talk Writing: Issue 19
Let's Talk Writing is my news article featuring five different writers that I've discovered here on deviantArt. It will be published every Friday. If you have any suggestions, please feel free to note me. I will take them into consideration (which means I'll most likely accept them.) Now, let's talk writing!
Writer #1: :iconblakecurran: *BlakeCurran

What inspired you to start writing?
I honestly can't remember when I even started writing; it feels like I've always wanted to write. But, the inspiration for me to keep writing comes from the notion of taking a nebulous idea and shaping it into a story, of turning essentially nothing into something — something real, something true and moving. I love to reach people through my words, even just to make them smile or to stop a moment and think.
Also, my dream job is to become a nove
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synconi Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013   Artisan Crafter
Transported to another realm and world by this, what a joy to read :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
aw thank you so much, Gabrielle :hug:
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Viidith22 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Astounding work as usual. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013
Thank you, Matthew, that's terribly kind of you.
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Viidith22 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. 
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013   Writer

What language is that phrase? US citizens aren't taught enough other languages, just dialects. Pfft.

This is terrific. I love the wind in juxtaposition, in close proximity, interest-wise by the male character, as the lotus is. :+favlove:

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013

My goodness thank you so much for your appreciation, and for fav'ing the piece. :heart:

 

The language is Egyptian Arabic.  And yes, I agree with your statement.

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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013   Writer

Ahahaa. I hafta check in with those I watch now and then, y'know.

If I don't, I miss some fine work!

And you're always welcome.

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013
:aww:
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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
omg i love egyptian things so so much, and this does not disappoint (you never do!). your poem contain such a lovely old world elegance that so many writers seemed to have forgotten. 
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013

Thank you so much, Carden -- your support of my efforts is greatly appreciated! ^.^

 

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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
just keep making beautiful pieces & i will keep on spam- commenting! :D 
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful. ^^
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013
Why thank you, Laura. :heart:
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:cuddle:
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner May 5, 2013
this is absolutely beautiful. the diction of this blew me away.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 6, 2013
gosh thank you so much - how you've honored me!
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner May 6, 2013
:heart:
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poetries Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
'the Nile of her dark eyes' and 'the narcotic of blue water lilies' are my favourite parts of this piece. Great diction! :clap:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
That means a lot to me of course, but also because I've always enjoyed this particular piece. It was a strong visual, animated and with such sound within my head, so writing it was a real joy. :hug:
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PennedinWhite Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A level of simplicity and beauty dancing together in rhythm.

Wonderful! :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
correction:

Ah thank you so very much, Shara, for sharing such lovely appreciation with me! :heart:
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PennedinWhite Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome! :) :hug:
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Searching and holding a desirable beauty.
Withstands repeated readings Jade. :rose:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Oh gosh Ron thank you for your lovely reading and appreciation of my piece. :heart: I'm sorry for the lag, I've been quite ill which I have lately been recovering from, so seeing your comment after all this time gave me a reason to smile.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:rose: I'm glad your better!
Praying for a full recovery. :pray:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
It's slow-going, but it's going. And thank you for your wishes. :heart:
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RestlessSands Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
the otherness of this is wonderful

so ive featured it in my journal: [link]

:heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
What a lovely surprise - thank you! :heart:
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RestlessSands Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
:love:
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
beautiful :D
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012
Thank you so very much, dear. :thanks:
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
you're welcome :D
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Bounty, azure, gleam, narcotic, I just love all of the word usage. Wonderful!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great imagery as always :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
aww :hug:
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
:iconhrtplz:
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You captured egypt's grandeur.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
Wow, that's amazing - did I do that?
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes. It was masterful.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
I'm about to add a preview piece to the poem, so if you want to see it, I'll have it posted soon. :)
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I shall look for it.
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Verreax Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you quero
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
¿qué?
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Verreax Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like.. ALOT!!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
aaaah! Thank you very much! :D
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Verreax Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
no problem!
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