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near my sick bed
he murmurs of how he's crumbling
but I'm still here
I've fought so long, I'm here
for a while I trust
I believe this, I must
even when it's bad, because
his faith alone is not enough

my random thoughts of how long
I have, and his thoughts of
"will she be able to outlive me" -
even at moments like this
it happens that
we hold on and speak of a future


ii

rolling restless this early morn'
you exhausted and I
drying up from a virus

spying through the shredding
of 250-thread count bedding,
between the hillocks of your shoulders

we never can sleep
in anticipation for what's to come

to plant the seed and watch it grow
though we will never see it bloom
for all the other things we know

and live beyond that fertile past
of what we did and what we'll do
as sleep will still not come to us

close apart, we dare not fall
from the tree that burns in season
counting the rings of our poetry


iii

the moon has set,
I wake in the dark
to the rush of wind

I hear him rinsing off
in the basin,
we fall asleep before dawn
:bulletblue: 4/11/13: What an honor for me, that this particular poem was suggested by :love: :devDr-Vergissmeinnicht: formerly known as noblequeenoflothaire, and featured by our venerated neurotype

:bulletred: 3/15/13: Featured here dreamsinstatic.deviantart.com#…
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The imagery in Counting the Rings by `jade-pandora "draws the reader into the depths of human nature" (suggester's words). ( Suggested by Dr-Vergissmeinnicht and Featured by neurotype )
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner May 17, 2013   Writer
This is utterly heartbreaking. I'm a bit at a loss for words but for as sad as this makes me feel, it's ten times as beautiful. I especially enjoyed your image with the tree rings which are a favorite thing of mine that I've always wished I could write about. You've done it perfectly here. The entire thing is lovely and you definitely deserved the DD. Even though you don't know me I want to say that I'm sorry you're going through this situation-- whatever health issue it may be. But your work speaks for itself and it sings.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to reply to your touching comment, Delaney, but the very issues the poem is about is why lately I'm not online as much as I used to be, to keep up with things like this -- and your words deserve the attention that I wasn't able to give sooner.

It's not been often that I write so directly about my medical struggles that try to lay me low for good. The first time I "came out" about it was when I wrote "Needles of Grass". And even when my writing goes into the darker recesses of my maladies, I'm grateful that I'm a poet -- for it's in my words that others can indeed hear my songs.

Thank you so very much.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   General Artist
and of course, congratulations on the DD! :tighthug:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
well fiddle-dee-dee, thank you! :love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   General Artist
you are so very welcome! :love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   General Artist
Goodness this is pretty stunning stuff, dearest Ms. Jade! :love:
You're incredible! :clap:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
:blushes: Ohhh you!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013   General Artist
:tighthug:
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rockeagle Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013
i loved how your feelings shaped the poem
your poem is talented and inspiring too
i like this kind of sense in the words
great job and keep the talent up ^^
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
I very much appreciate you sharing with me your embracing my poem - thank you so much. ^.^
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