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moon guides me
on its voyage,
night wind
goes deep,
insinuating bones

fingers as white,
tonguing
the marrow of me-
I can't shiver the
chill from my soul

as intense as
everything I feel
while there's life,
who could
sustain it

a sadness
adrift,
where it takes me
I don't know,
I don't wonder

too numb
to feel the course
moon steers-
eyes soft focus,
total eclipse
©2008-2009 `jade-pandora
:iconjade-pandora:

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a long night without him





June 5, 2008: my humble tanka set, now graced with a DD, thanking the powers-that-be. :heart:

Daily Deviation

Given 2008-06-05

In Eclipse by *jade-pandora, each brilliantly vivid tanka has a magic all entirely its own. (Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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:iconkeraness:
These are really beautiful. :heart: Number two gave me chills. The third and fourth tanka are my favourites. I love their pacing and how pretty they sound. They're also very deep and philosophical, and I love that as well. This collection works well as one combined poem, as well; it sounds great when read altogether.
:iconblue-froggy:
:love:

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however far away i will always love you however
long i stay i will always love you whatever
words i say i will always love you i will always
love you

By The Cure
:iconretrozombie:
I don't have any words adequate for this piece, Jade. Even in your sadness you're so eloquent.

:heart:

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玉: 我的天使 ♥
Always look on the bright side... there's more light there and it's easier to find stuff.
:iconwalkingfish:
very elegant and beautiful. I absolutely love it, it's like a soothing lullaby :)

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There's a good reason why this signature is here, I just haven't figured it out yet.
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this is a link to a MAGICAL place:[link]
:iconlaurence55:
Jade, this piece is beautiful and for me holds a meaning deeper than the power of your stanza structure. As you know, I have been dealing with personal tragedy lately. For me, the third and fourth stanzas illustrate the sense of being "adrift" in a period of isolation. However, I must confess that they also remind me that opening to others is necessary...even the toughest warrior needs the raft of friendship...thank you. As always, your work is deeply poignant
:iconjade-pandora:
Your perception on the many levels of this set is appreciated so much, and i thank you for going into the details because, as you know, it's good to know the impact and how close you and the reader have come together! :heart:

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:iconjade-pandora:
Thank you dear one. i knew i couldn't turn my back on what i heard within myself, and as the set took shape, the words became exquisite sanctification because of the sadness. :heart:

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:iconjade-pandora:
i'm overwhelmed, thank you! :hug:

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:iconretrozombie:
:heart:

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玉: 我的天使 ♥
Always look on the bright side... there's more light there and it's easier to find stuff.

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