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Without a breeze to soothe my body,
or salvage a mind
from the dripping tide of cicadas,

the midnight of summer begins to
lift its mantle from where you crouch,
and comes to honor me.

My gentle cannibal,
with eyes of hemorrhaging iris,
the jaundice of your nakedness,

translucent from the moon rings
ghosting overhead,
your lips pulled as if in pain.

The fever of your touch traces
every rung of dappled trellis
from the faux shadings of a lunar day.

Give me my sweet plunder of ripe figs
as you bend me like a bow that will snap,
or have you already bitten me to the bone.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014   General Artist

with eyes of hemorrhaging iris,
the jaundice of your nakedness,


^this. :heart:

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
awww :tighthug: thank you so much, sweetheart :heart:
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wdnest Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Is this poem of a particular format? ie number of words/syllables - i could not pick up the format. It is interesting in this format.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
Hello. No, this is not a format regarding particular numbers of words and syllables. It's free form. It sounds like you enjoy the poem, and for that I'm glad. :)
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kabloona Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
I think the use of the word/image cannibal is perfect. In one fanciful word it establishes the approach of the male and the fanciful view of the female towards him. Need I say more?
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kabloona Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
On an impression level: do you think the word nakedness draws too much attention to that line? I think it does for me.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Sorry it took me so long to reply to your question:

No, absolutely not - in fact, it's a line that impacts the reader to set him/her up for what comes next in the piece. Without the strength of the image that the word brings up, the rest of the poem would lack something important in its image.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is creepy as shit and I love it.

"dripping tide of cicadas" brings the vague quiet wrongness in from the start and it just slowly ramps up from there.

love it.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012
Wow, I love your reaction!

Your reading is wonderful in the way you express how the piece "slowly ramps up...". I thank you for taking the time to give me your thoughts, and for the fave.
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