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Without a breeze to soothe my body,
or salvage a mind
from the dripping tide of cicadas,

the midnight of summer begins to
lift its mantle from where you crouch,
and comes to honor me.

My gentle cannibal,
with eyes of hemorrhaging iris,
the jaundice of your nakedness,

translucent from the moon rings
ghosting overhead,
your lips pulled as if in pain.

The fever of your touch traces
every rung of dappled trellis
from the faux shadings of a lunar day.

Give me my sweet plunder of ripe figs
as you bend me like a bow that will snap,
or have you already bitten me to the bone.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014   General Artist

with eyes of hemorrhaging iris,
the jaundice of your nakedness,


^this. :heart:

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
awww :tighthug: thank you so much, sweetheart :heart:
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wdnest Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Is this poem of a particular format? ie number of words/syllables - i could not pick up the format. It is interesting in this format.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
Hello. No, this is not a format regarding particular numbers of words and syllables. It's free form. It sounds like you enjoy the poem, and for that I'm glad. :)
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kabloona Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
I think the use of the word/image cannibal is perfect. In one fanciful word it establishes the approach of the male and the fanciful view of the female towards him. Need I say more?
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kabloona Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
On an impression level: do you think the word nakedness draws too much attention to that line? I think it does for me.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Sorry it took me so long to reply to your question:

No, absolutely not - in fact, it's a line that impacts the reader to set him/her up for what comes next in the piece. Without the strength of the image that the word brings up, the rest of the poem would lack something important in its image.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is creepy as shit and I love it.

"dripping tide of cicadas" brings the vague quiet wrongness in from the start and it just slowly ramps up from there.

love it.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012
Wow, I love your reaction!

Your reading is wonderful in the way you express how the piece "slowly ramps up...". I thank you for taking the time to give me your thoughts, and for the fave.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
Beautiful diction - incorporating pieces of nature. Makes it feel so natural, just like the event taking place. :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Thank you so much, I'm glad it speaks to you thus. :heart:
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
You're very welcome. :aww:
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etienneell Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, this conjures up some interesting images! :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
That's a good thing any way you look at it. :D
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TallCanXD Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
BEAUTIFUL!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Really? You think so? aww thank you! :hug:
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TallCanXD Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Truely! You are most welcome, friend.
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PixiesPoisonedPen Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Oh my - this is quite the delight. Such a visceral choice of language but the feel of the piece is soft and embracing and treacley.... beautiful and very skilled.

:heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Bex! Thank you so much for coming by to give me your winderful feedback. :hug:

It's not often I get to see you. My best goes with you. :heart:
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PixiesPoisonedPen Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Aw - you sweet lovely thing you! I'm not around terribly much at present... life just not giving me much to work with coherently, I'm afraid... though I must admit, that is a terribly good thing - since I seem to find my creativity when I am very sad or very angry and I am neither of these things! Yey!!!

Hope you are sickeningly happy too :D

:tighthug:
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student Writer
I absolutely love that the lover/intended audience is described as being a cannibal. And that this cannibal is somehow beautiful and vulnerable, but ultimately violent and capable of destroying the narrator.

Love. :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
*coos* I love your reading of the piece -- thank you so much for sharing your thoughts about it with me! :heart:
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, thank you! I'm glad! :heart:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Ohhhh! :faint:
There is so much in this poem! You put me right into an exquisite moment of memory. *shivers deliciously*

I love what you've done with some of the lines of the original draft that you wrote. You've crafted them into a work equal to the power and vibrancy of your strongest works! Brava! :clap:
:iconnuzzleplz: :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
:faint:
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randomaxes Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
i really love the dark lament and imagery.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Thank you so much. I'm very honored, Harry, truly.
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randomaxes Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
you're very welcome.
it's completely /my/ pleasure, Jadey.
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randomaxes Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
dark eroticism.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Yes - I can never write one piece after another without going to that place on a regular basis. it's like lately - I've written new works that you might consider more uplifting in one way, but sooner or later, it's time when the muse helps me to express the facet of me that will not be refused or ignored.
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randomaxes Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
it seems to work for you...no reason to fight it :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
:laughing: I've never been known to fight something like that! And I'm glad you think it works.
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witwitch Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
Oh goodness, this poem is so thick with imagery.

It gives me the impression of a relationship which has reached its climax and is about to descend, most likely in to something unhealthy, but the speaker wants it to continue never-the-less.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Thank you for your spot-on reading of this piece; it helps confirm to me that the intent and meaning comes through more than even I have yet to realize (having just written the poem and posted it mere hours ago).
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witwitch Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome, your poetry is very rich.

Mostly, the last stanza gives this away, as well as the way the speaker addresses the "gentle cannibal" character throughout the piece; it's very dark and sensual, but it also feels like stepping around the edge of an abyss, contemplating diving in.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Your continuation of impressions from your reading just get better & better!
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witwitch Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
I feel flattered, and yet you're the one who's written the poem!

Thank you for saying so. I think I'll have to "watch" you and read more of your poetry!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
I wrote the poem, yes, but for me, half of the joy I get is from writing a piece, the other half is how it is received by others. You are a gift.
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witwitch Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student Writer
I certainly understand the feeling.

And thank you very much for saying so--once again, I'm flattered.
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