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It is when spirit has released its
circle into a sea of impetus-

the will of force, to start and end
a journey past, and then begin again.

Traditional spells aside,
with much to abort and to abide,

to assuage the widow moon's bridge-keeper
with bribes of all that you promise her.

Lest you wade the murky depths in the
guise of an albino salamander,

avoiding consumption while traversing
the maze of surface fires

that block the way, and flotillas of
man-o-war jellyfish

their tentacles rife with voltage
to your slithering canopy.

And from the mantle of your blindness
you sense amidst the current

a jagged danger on the far side
where brittle struts from bone of baleen

threaten to sabotage the integrity
of your shape-shifting escape.

Little-known the consequences.
No book of shadows to guide us,

nor the written divination of runes, or
reed scriptures from the after world.

The encryption simply reads that
there is nothing more, once it is begun.
Imagery from the dualities of my spiritual and pagan roots is the simplest way to explain what I've just written.

:bulletred: 8/15/11: a companion poem written by Anna ~charrlie in response to mine: "Conception" [link]
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HouseofCantor Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
I see emergence. Is there some Deism in those roots of yours?
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011
My apologies for not having gotten to a reply to your thoughtful, insightful comment/quiry!

I think you've made a fantastic observation when you bring up Deism. It is the closest idea to this poem's meanings just short of the nail's head of my pagan beliefs - I say well done, and thank you.
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Student Writer

"The encryption simply reads that
there is nothing more, once it is begun."

Love. What a great ending to a fabulous piece. :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011
Thank you, thank you, Emily - thank you. :heart:
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Student Writer
You're most welcome, darling :heart:
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Love these images. Don't know where they're taking me, but by the end I know I'm glad to be there.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011
That means so much to me - thank you, Thomas.
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Writer
Your work inspired this piece:
[link]
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
I'm so very honored that my words moved you to create a companion poem to mine - thank you very much. :heart:
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Student Writer
You are so welcome :heart:
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pixieplay Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011
The more I read of your work and speak with you personally, the more I'm convinced that in some past life, we were sisters.

At the beginning of this year, I began studying Wicca. I became absolutely addicted to the religion and all its wisdom. It seems almost as though it was specifically tailored for me. So obviously, reading references to the book of shadows and spells made me more than a little giddy. :aww:

Traditional spells aside,
with much to abort and to abide,

to assuage the widow moon's bridge-keeper
with bribes of all that you promise..


I especially love this part.

Wonderful word-working, as always. :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Oh Kera :hug:
as you know from our little exchange via email, there is much for us to share about this new experience that has opened up for you, and helped refresh for me that which I've touched upon in this poem after years of not having found an outlet with another until now. I hope we can connect soon so that I may enjoy your enthusiasm, and I can continue to re-connect with my own experiences. I'm so glad you let me know about your new awakenings! :heart:
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pixieplay Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011
I have you to thank in large part for my transitions. You were a great influence on me and gave me the freedom to question, to think for myself, and to explore. Once I did enough exploring, I found my path, as well as more of myself. I hope we can connect soon, too! :hug: :heart:

PS - 'After the Blizzard' is going to be mailed off soon! :boogie:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011
Thank you so much, sweet one! :hug: :heart:
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RawPoetry Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011   Photographer
Wow, could this be any more original?! :faint:
Such incredible imagery and language, I have never seen another piece of writing that is anywhere near like this before! Great work! :clap:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
I can't tell you how glad I am that my poem can move you to places you've never been before - thank you so very much, Carly! :hug:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011   Writer
a metaphysical (metamorphic) triumph. this has more meaning that can be discerned from the dim eyes of consciousness - one can tell it needs the inner pupil.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Thank you so much, Shane - I hope it continues to speak to you, sparking still more flint in the passageway that continues to take you deeper. Would you like a guide to assist you on your way?
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011   Writer
any additional illumination you wish to offer is more than welcome :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011
ah... just so you know...

I've been awaiting to hear from you as to anything you'd like to know. (note or gmail, either way)
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Mahi-Fish Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011
Jade,

I know we already spoke about this piece in real time, but I thought to leave you the same or similar thoughts here so that you would have them should you ever want to refer back to them.

This piece to me has matured nicely. I know that you were unhappy with your initial drafts, but I think it is something that you can be proud of. Much of the imagery is outside of my sphere of knowledge, so I won't comment much on it. I will say however that it comes through with remarkable clarity, and is easy to follow even for one who is looking in from the outside so to speak.

Other than the image interplay with the salamander and the man-o-war, my favorite part of the poem has to do with some of the choices you've made regarding sounds. The first case of this is the very first stanza. The long string of /s/ sounds between the first two lines was extremely effective at conjuring up the image of the spirit beginning this cyclical journey.

The next instance I found is in the third stanza. The rhyme with aside/abide as well as the double infinitive construction of to abort/to abide makes the stanza almost feel like an invocation. The effect was subtle, but lovely. I noticed that abide also recalls the sound of bribes which crops up in the next stanza.

The next, and perhaps my favorite, is also the most subtle. To me, the repeated /ma/ syllables in the last line of 5,6, and 7 really felt like the dangling tentacles of jellyfish. It took me several readings to find this, but I love the repeated sound.

There is the sound similarities between guise and maize. The two diphthongs which end at the same point followed by the /z/ was quite lovely. Better than a rhyme in many ways I think.


Finally, at the end I liked how the sounds in written and divination lead up to those in encryption.

I'm glad we had a chance to talk about this poem last night. It certainly took some time for me to appreciate fully, but I'm very glad I gave it the chance. Well done Jade.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
As you know, your company watching over me on my journey to reach all that was meant to be from within myself & my muse to grace this piece, provided just enough to give me the confidence I needed. And thank you for delving into the linguistics/sounds of the poem - it is always such a pleasure to hear you explain your findings with the knowledge you give so generously. :heart:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011
I have just now read this poem again; wandered through it's passageways with the meager illumination of my imperfect insights. Each traversal brings revelations, and the journeys we took hand-in-hand brought the greatest of these. I know that this poem had shared breath with my own muse; you've seen for yourself the fruits of that union.

Your voice is unique and beautiful--and this poem a wealth of visions and layers, that will unfold to me in the course of my venturings through your vibrant passages.

It is not enough to exist--it is through your words that I find the spark and… live!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Even days after you left this lovely comment, I'm sure the poem's reverberations still continue to internalize and enlighten. When we have the chance, I'd like to tell you about some of the parts that can't help but be more obscure for you, giving me the chance to figure out how I will do it. :heart:
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love the ending here
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Ah at last I'm getting around to reply to your comment, dear Jenni - I've been taking in all that people have said in response to this rather unusual poem, to find that many like yourself have absorbed the layers in your own unique way. I want you to know how much I appreciate when you come by to tell me your thoughts - and for this poem in particular. Thank you thank you. <3
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome, it was really good to read :)
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Sneds Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011
Beautiful work, Jade.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Thank you so much, Ned - it's good to hear from you, and an honor.
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Sneds Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
My pleasure, as always; and you are too kind with you words.
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011  Student Writer
I love the conclusion: once the divine or incredible is reached, what guidebook can show you where to go next?
It seems even in our revelation, we are blind <3 But that does not lessen the fantastic nature of our revelation!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Responses such as yours about this poem have had me hesitate, to give myself some time before giving a reply; so glad am I to see how people are made to feel from the meanings that exude from the stanzas. I can clearly see how affected you are in the ways you describe your impressions of its imagery and whispers. You have embraced them with such openness of purpose to process & express in return, which adds yet more to the depth of the piece. I am overwhelmed!
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Student Writer
I can say only that I think I've begun to mimic Alecbell. I am so glad you do not mind such a response.
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ThrowAwayGirl Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011
I like this!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
I'm so very glad, dear - thank you, and please excuse my late reply. :)
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ThrowAwayGirl Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
You're welcome... it's not that late!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
oh good, I'm glad you think so! :)
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ThrowAwayGirl Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011
Awesome!
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irvon Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011
Deconstructing then reconstructing oneself over and over again can be a painful process, and one that can't really be talked about. That is what this poem tells me (in a beautiful way), with rich images. Being a pagan myself, I can really relate to this.

I love the duality of the sea (water) and the salamander (fire) and the sense of hostility with which you juggle in the middle stanzas, which build up to the shape-shifting escape. Then the last three stanzas are nicely retrospective, a sort of contemplative reprise of the first stanzas. And yet there is no sense of discontinuity, the middle section easily flowing out of the first four stanzas and into the final three stanzas.

Brilliant poem, Jade. :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
gosh Herman, I hope you will excuse my late response, but all you said so soon after I posted the poem has just blown me away -- how wonderful the reading, how insightful your observations, and how much I appreciate your appreciation of what all is said in the layers of this piece -- and then to also relate to the pagan concepts herein, what more could I have hoped for, thank you thank you! :heart:
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irvon Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011
It's all you, Jade. ;) But I'm glad you aprpreciate my appreciation. :heart:

Don't worry about the late response, I suspect you get a lot of comments and deviations in your inbox. :)
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