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Sunday was chicken and collards with rice.
Yesterday, fried ham and bacon served twice.
But today, no Lord, it's in your hands—
ain't nothin’ shaken on this plate, just the baby grand.

I get tipsy when bread dough’s risin’, like my love.
Good God, I can’t help myself, like my love.
Straight from the stove,
butter meltin’ on slabs o’ warm bread.
I say, I get tipsy when the yeast goes to my head.

Sweet Jesus, I can’t hear you,
you know  what I’m talkin’ about.
Soon as the weather breaks tonight,
she's goin’ out, she won’t be stayin’ in.
She’ll smell BBQ from the chicken shack
near the red lights 'cross town.

But this sinner don’t care what she wears
or doesn't cook, and I'll beg
as the darkness swallows her from my sight.

I was listening to some prime blues on my headphones last night and suddenly got the urge to write some "song lyrics" like I'd written a blues song myself. The rough draft has since gone through numerous tweaks. Still, I enjoyed putting this together even though I've never written a piece in this style, but blues has been running through me ever since I can remember listening to music. If you want to hear the music that inspired me, click on the link: www.youtube.com/watch?v=tWwUQ6… - Robert William Gary Moore (4 April 1952[1] – 6 February 2011), was a Northern Irish musician, most widely recognised as a singer and guitarist.)

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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-01-05
:iconcelestialmemories:
CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is very beautiful lovely Jade :)

Congratulations on your DD (sorry I'm so late :hug:)
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
:hug: Gosh thank you so very much, Kyle - certainly it's better late than never, besides, you're actually not late at all, not for something like this! :blowkiss:
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:iconcelestialmemories:
CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:la: 

We have a restaurant here that has live jazz and blues every Wednesday and this felt like something I would hear there! :hug: 

You are very welcome!
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:boogie:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
heheh Oh Stop It 
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oursofdevoid Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
I like this, very bluesy lol
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Why thank you, Woodrow - yes, that's the idea. :nod:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A wonder for sure. :)
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
Llama Emoji-02 (Blush) [V1] Ahh Ronnie, you're just sayin' that. Oh Stop It 
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Sounddrive Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's a lovely read. :D
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Aww thank you so very much, dear - and it's always a pleasure to meet another word crafter.

:writer: 

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Sounddrive Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, and likewise! :D
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:iconchasingshadowsphoto:
ChasingShadowsPhoto Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Photographer
Hi, I just wanted to say a few things real quick. First, congrats on the DD! :D Second, I really like this. It's full of lovely metaphors and has a great rhythm about it. And thirdly, THANK YOU for introducing me to that song. It is simply beautiful! Reminds me a lot of a song by Slash that I truly adore, also one by Great White. I'm always on the lookout for smooth bluesy music like that but it's hard for me to find for some reason. So thanks a ton for linking it in your description! ^_^ Keep writing and congrats again!!
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Thank you so much, Anna! :hug:


Not only am I glad for the appreciation you have of the poem, but for checking out the link so you could hear that wonderful blues sound - I have always adored that kind of blues.


Cheers to you, and Happy New Year! Cheers with Champagne Emoticon 

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ChasingShadowsPhoto Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Student Photographer
:hug: Cheers back to you and happy new year!!!
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UltimaMage578 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
I immediately began singing it in a bluesy voice as soon as I saw it in the DD thing.

It is amazing. Very simple yet brilliant imagery, and I honestly can hear it sung.  With a deep bluesy voice, a piano, maybe some drums, and a depressing sounding sax.
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Oh gosh thank you so much, Seeka, for your appreciation and for your fave of the poem.


If you'd like to listen to the type of blues sound that influenced me to write the piece, please click onto the link in my author's comments which will take you to youtube to hear the music.


All the best. Swingin' On a Star _revamp_ 

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UltimaMage578 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
Welcomes!

I'll be sure to do that when I can~

Thanks!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Heyyyyyyy.....a DD!! Congrats, lady! Wonderful work to be featured! (:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Heart La Heyyyy thank youuuu, da'lin'! :youdontseeme: emote  
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really fantastic; I love it c: Congrats on the DD! <3
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

omgosh thank you SO much, Jen - my Daily D sister!


And thank you so much for honoring my poem with a FAVE! :glomp:

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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, of course! :highfive: :giggle: :huggle:

You're very welcome! You did such a nice job :love:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Dancing :la: Cheerleader 
Heart Animation :heart: rvmp :love: Heart bum Heart Animation 
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Hatsune Miku-09 (No No No No) Yessssssss!! Spread More Love Emote - PLZ :laheart: Floating hearts 1 small heart - rainbow :heart1: :heart4: 
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fllnthblnk Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like dis.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Hi Will - wow, thank you - I'm glad to see you here, stranger!  Your appreciation & enjoyment of anything I write is always a treat for me from an accomplished fellow word crafter. :hug:


Thanks so much for the fave....  Happy New Year!

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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
I love the bluesy rhythm of this piece and the words and images lifted me up!  Congratulations on your DD! :clap:
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Aww thank you so much, sweetie, I'm grateful for your appreciation!


And thank you for faving the poem! :D

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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Thank you so much, Cristina :hug:

and look at that little face on your new avatar - how sweet! :heart:

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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :heart:
Aww thank you :glomp:
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poetries Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
YAY Jadey!! :iconlawooplz: Congrats on yet ANOTHER DD! Goodness, how many does that make? Ten?! You deserve each and every one of 'em! :hug: :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Sweet one! :glomp:  Thank you so much for your words - and actually, officially it's 10, but there was the one you got of "true north" that we collaborated on which I've always considered the (currently) 11th DD.  I miss our collaborations, and I miss you - and we wish you and yours a HAPPY NEW YEAR! :hearthug: 
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poetries Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
That's right, True North is technically the 11th! :) I miss you too. If you would ever like to collaborate again, feel free to drop me a note! 

I hope you and John have the happiest of new years! :hug: :heart:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014   Writer
Hey, congrats on the feature, Jade!  This one is so obviously meant to be sung to the blues.  It is well strung for it. 
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Jeepers, thanks so much Shane - I'm not used to seeing you up so late, but I'm glad you were able to stop by.  Your visit, comment, and reason for both come as a total surprise.  I had no idea this poem would ever receive such a feature!


(p.s.  Did you check out the youtube link from my author's comment?)


Happy New Year, btw. :3

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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014   Writer
Happy New Year to you too, Jade! Yeah, I was up too late when I noticed your piece at the bottom of the page.  I will be sure to check out your link. I hope you're doing well. :)
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
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:heart: Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :tighthug:  
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Thank you very much, lovely. :hug:
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Student Writer
In the style of Jack Kerouac. *snaps fingers* 
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
Gosh, I wasn't even trying to imitate Kerouac's style - more of the soul of blues (please check out the link I've provided for readers to hear some of the type music that influenced me to write such a poem - my first of this kind, btw). You may find it moving.

And it's funny you should mention Kerouac because I have a poem I wrote over this past week (I keep tweaking bits of it because as each day passes, it reads differently to me), and I deliberately let the flavor of some of his style become infused into the piece. I also spent most of this Sunday (now passed by 8 minutes) debating whether to post it at all. Your comment has given me pause to possibly change my mind. If I do post it, however, I need to tweak it once more, and then we'll see.
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, I did not mean that in a negative connotation at all, my friend! I was just listening to his "Poetry for the Beat Generation" and the sweet blues, mixed with the accent you gave in this just made me think of him. :) I would gladly take a listen!

I would be more than happy to read it once it has been posted. And, of course, I can always give honest feedback to ya. :nod:
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014

Oh hey, I didn't take anything you said as negative - I was glad to get your comment and your thoughts, and your appreciation. :3


I thought I'd clarify that at this time when, to my surprise & delight, this very poem as garnered a Daily Deviation - so I'm kind of celebrating.


Thanks again, and Happy New Year! Happy 2014! 

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Operia Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi there! :wave:
I'm here on behalf of :iconfriendly-features:

You've been featured in this week's Featured Showcase

Have a nice day :D
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
:eager: Thank you so much, Kels!
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Operia Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :aww:
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Student General Artist
This is really pretty phenomenal for a lyric.
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Why thank you so much, Crispen - and it's good to see you stopping by. How've you been doing?
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