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Act I

the fever hit quickly
it always did-
his lust compelled
brought her to him
wrapped in a rug

sans a compass
to moor within her,
astounded by the song
that played off her pelvis
with his semen

he swooned
taking her into himself,
wanting it completely-
his third eye in orbit
seeing nothing else

needing nothing more
and famished
for everything-
to pine as if
pining was lust


Act II

an open window,
lent inwards to the
weep of a violin
playing once through
and never again

the talent
of his consumption
for her
for a heartbeat,
a virginal moment

not to question,
with mind at rest
and body floating-
unflinchingly
in denial

lure of a dark cry-
he could not turn to her
nor could he let go
this perversion, where
air thins till there's none


Act III

trembling
at the mercy
of his lover,
there was no grace
and none sought

orgasmic
words and thoughts,
erotic intellect
flowed-
anonymous art

his fingers,
tight within
the leaking chink
to staunch the flow
but never tried

the irony
was not lost
how it ended,
drawing out more
than one fathomed
©2008-2009 `jade-pandora
:iconjade-pandora:

Author's Comments

Three acts -- three linked tanka.

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:iconretrozombie:
Beautifully lyrical! You capture well the poetic nature of this aspect of humanity.

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玉: 我的天使 ♥
Always look on the bright side... there's more light there and it's easier to find stuff.
:iconetienneell:
wow, cold shower time...beautifully, lusty stuff!

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etienne ell
:icon8ankh:
I read this yesterday and couldn't think of anything to write, so didn't. It is a beautiful series--really makes me want to, ah, be more social. I particularly like how the words "orbit," and "more" work together in the first part (third and fourth stanzas).

I think (and stop me from doing this in the future if you mind) that the word "thoughts" could be depluralized to "thought" to achieve the same kind of bond--the one I mentioned above with "orbit" and "more" (that I liked)--with the word "sought." I guess it would be a different bond, though. It is the sound I like, with the "or--," and "mor-," and perhaps it is too with the hard "t" end of the second pair--ah well, I know nothing--just a thought.

crazy brilliant poem! I'd like to hear it read in a sexy jazz voice.

:orange: PEACE

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browse me/know me
:iconxpositive-drugx:
the 3rd part hit me like a pure wave of bliss , and at the same time sexual sin...one again Jade YOU ARE THE SHIT!!!

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"Men like me because of whats in my brassiere and what i seem to think .
Women like me because I don\'t look like a girl
who would steal a husband. At least not for long.\"
:iconbluewave:
:faint: and fans myself

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Life is an adventure in forgiveness.

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:iconkoppo:
I enjoyed it,Especially III.This feels very personal for some reason.April has been kind to you,and you have filled the form of tanka with great promise.Great work jadey-pie.

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I Don't Need No Help,I Can Do Bad on My OwN
Leave Me Lonely,Like You Did Last Time...
:iconjade-pandora:
i'm so glad you enjoyed the set... and yes...

everything i write is always personal -- always.

April and i were kind to each other ;)... i'm playing ...

i really appreciate your words, and tanka definately is a form i've taken to, it flows from me!

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:iconjade-pandora:
now that's a compliment! :D

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