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Migrations

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"Migrations" (haibun)


Facing the ocean with the afternoon growing old, I listlessly watch beyond this living, heaving sight for hours, until the sunlight burns through, turning into undulating yellow savanna for as far as I can see. Herds of wildebeests, co-mingling with zebra, their black and white stripes interchange with the sea of tall grass. They move toward the ancient riverbeds still yet to be engorged from distant storm clouds that won’t give up their precious cargo for another month.  Breezes come off the surf with the scent of a kill I hear out of range.

It's as if the entire curve of the earth from end to end has compressed into this singular moment.

dangling my legs
off the edge of a pier,
the casting of fishing lines
blurs into
passing migrations
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:bulletred:5/6/10: Even to those not familiar with the form this piece is written, my quiry to members would be if the Japanese style known as Haibun creates a unique and therefore more artistic setting for the imagery I've presented here? As always, your thoughts are most appreciated, thank you. ^.^

My third foray into the Japanese poetic style known as Haibun. Haibun is a linked form which combines haiku or tanka with narrative. This piece has a tanka link.

Other haibun I've written:

:bulletgreen: "The Mouse and the Pea" [link]
:bulletred: "Firebrands" [link]
:bulletorange: "Haibun I" [link]
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MrsPortman's avatar
Visualising is an easy thing to do, if someone gives you a superb description. And what I'm seeing right now is beautiful.
Well done :)