Why so unsure? This is beautiful - especially descriptive and in a way I find refreshing, alluring.

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Loveless

Why thank you Charles. I don't know why I'm unsure - sometimes I'm up so late after working on a piece - this one inparticular I had been worked & reworked for three nights. That's maybe two nights too long. Sometimes I'm so exhausted, I can't make a sound judgement call. And last night, it was like trailing along behind one of those hunting orcas, hanging on for dear life while it took me through an entire ocean.

I think I'm unsure of posting it in my gallery proper cause I actually like the piece, though I'm still internalizing what it means to me. So your words might help me to decide. I know you're not just saying them to placate me - I trust that you find the piece to be refreshing and alluring - words I never thought I'd see anyone say in describing the poem. I wish to thank you most sincerely for finding it beautiful and for fav'ing it.



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玉

Wow... given your feeling on it, I'd say that explains a lot about the poem itself That's a long time to work over a piece, too... so I think I can understand your hesitation further - no piece that I've sat on for a great length of time has ever gone well for me.

Really? Wow... I have to say that that surprises me - as you wrote it, one would assume you already know what it means to you... again, really? XD I'm not sure why - it's one short, lone opinion from a rather lame source Decide on its own merit.

Refreshing and alluring, yes, because of the utterly different mood, feel and subject material - by and large, the work you tend to post is sexual in nature, about you and your lover and while those are exquisite, they're still not this... deeper, infinitely more expansive and delightfully, beautifully, engrossingly descriptive. You have a talent for describing in general, this is true... but I don't know, this is very, very different.

You're welcome, of course

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Loveless

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Loveless

Ah the update got the submission to show at last - let's celebrate!

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玉

WOOHOO!



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Loveless

I love the sensuality of this piece, Jade - how you make the events of the poem become sexual through word choice. It comes to me like a mural painted in dark blues and crimson on a black velvet canvas.

This poem is so rich and vivid, and shows once again your depth and versatility as a writer.



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玉: 我的天使 ♥
Always look on the bright side... there's more light there and it's easier to find stuff.

Gosh thank you so much John - it was a complex, challenging piece to write, so I'm grateful that you were able to feel and see the imagery as I'd hoped.



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玉

dear Chas, I just wanted to reiterate how much I appreciate the details of your perception of this piece - it really helped my confidence in giving it a second chance. And I'm especially pleased that it is so different.

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玉