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drama in the park
she throws his napsack-
butterfly t-shirts

-2-

imported apples-
a dog's
peace offering

-3-

zoo trip-
baboon curls his lip
at me

-4-

pet rat
fat and content
with its short life

-5-

from an air duct
desperately
seeking cricket

-6-

weeding-
depopulation from
strangulation

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dogs in the park
dressed for the runway-
weekend walkies

-8-

suddenly
the sound of wings-
going so soon?
©2008-2009 `jade-pandora
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A few days before entering into the Summer HaikuWriMo, offering some senryu treats.

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:iconretrozombie:
Oh, I love them! Especially the one about the cricket, that made me laugh out loud!

A great warm-up for the WriMo, Jade! :heart:

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玉: 我的天使 ♥
Always look on the bright side... there's more light there and it's easier to find stuff.
:iconmoyanii:
the last is reminiscent of my recent take on photography. the birds always left far too soon, before i got them into focus of my camera.

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~secret study~
~silent studio~
:iconrickdanger:
I blame you and ~Amy--Louise for getting me psyched into doing the Haikuwrimo :D
I'm still learning about senryu, tanka and haiku, but perhaps I should give it a try.

For what is worth, I really like number three and its littlle 2-5-2 lines. Can't help but smile ;)

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Dangers of Poetry: :heart:play it! :new:flip it!
:iconb1gfan:
delightful - the last two especially...so active and fleeting
:iconjade-pandora:
you're so kind to say, and thank you very much for your appreciation of my little senryu set :heart:

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:iconjade-pandora:
then my work here is complete... to have someone smile at something i've written, and to help be responsible for someone participating for the first time in this wonderful and worthy event...

i'm happy, too... thank you so very much! :rose:

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:iconjade-pandora:
ohh yes i know what you mean, and the impression you got is perfect with my words! :hug:

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:iconjade-pandora:
:aww: Sometimes, with all of the wonderful comments you post for so much of my writing, it seems what comes down to bedrock is to use that dog-eared and time-worn reply that i say in earnest and with all the appreciation i can possibly show...

thank you so very much! :heart:

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:iconaqua-rat:
I enjoyed it very much. I especially like the last one which was very appropriate for the ending.

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THIS IS THE GATE OF HEAVEN. ENTER YE ALL BY THIS DOOR. (This door is kept locked because of the draught - please use side door.)

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