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song of earth
flows in my veins
tributaries

grounded within
her womb, reborn
each sunrise

song of daybreak
a crescendo,
mating with the sun

nerves aflame,
solar arc
travels down my spine

song of sky-
currents of birds
on up-drafted clouds

shadows float
caressing my body's
landscape

song of midnight,
a deep thrum of
sensual umber

bathes the eyes,
becoming the
color of my hair

song of my smile-
tender entreaty
for my lover

harmony
requests your voice-
we'll learn the words
©2008-2009 `jade-pandora
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Beautiful piece. I love the song of midnight especially. And thanks for the new word (umber).

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The lion within, I roar.
Stretch bow, let arrow soar.
To protect your love.
ohh it's my pleasure, and thank you!

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I like the shadows floating over the body bit best - the clouds from the sky.
sensual and umber seem to go together naturally.

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a song of hopw lovely!

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Great piece. The beginning has a really intense tone; your word choice is perfect for the powerful, untamed imagery you describe. The poem then slowly shifts to a more softer tone toward the end, leaving the reader with an uplifting sense of hope. :] Nice work.

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thank you :rose:

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Life is what happens to you while you're busy making other plans.
That's so wonderfully kind of you, your lovely comment/observation/perspective about my little piece -- thank you! :hug:

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Life is what happens to you while you're busy making other plans.
I calls 'em as I sees 'em! :giggle: :hug:

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I keep coming back to this one and I still can't find words equal to the feelings that the poem stirs in me. It sweeps me away, and all ability to explain what I feel is left earthbound and remote.

Hope summons such great beauty from you. :heart:

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Always look on the bright side... there's more light there and it's easier to find stuff.

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