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Seeking a parallel in quietus
from the smoking fields of nebulae
where I could see all there is,

while reality floats,
its distance doubling with the
passing of each second.

To discover there are no grasslands,
that there never was a serenity
and how lonely I am for that.

Only the tundra of planets
with equators untouched
by their inner engines

in an existence unchanged through
the fish-eye lens of light years with
tilted skull caps lined up like dominoes.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem. Honestly I do!

What I love most about this poem is that... vicarious indifference portrayed in the sadness of stanza three and four. Its as if the person doesn't belong here at all... as if their alien, and because of this alien presence they are only going to inevitably bleach upon what makes this world so worthwhile...

A light shining out upon empty space, where everything is as completely overwhelmed in a vacuum, as it is complete absolution and freedom put in such... a state as space (with repeated ripplings of history).

A beautiful poem... a very beautiful poem worth reading, and worth contemplating over. Bravo!
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013

Swingin' On a Star _revamp_   Thank you so much...

 

 That's a wonderful reading, it means a lot, and how much I appreciate you sharing all of this with me!

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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)

You're an awesome writer! Period!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely word choices.

I especially liked the fourth stanza.
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
Why thank you so much, it means a lot. Cat blob 
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TheMoltenDragon Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The word choice is amazing. Gorgeous!
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Why thank you, Hannah, you're very kind!
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poetries Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
That introduction is probably one of my favourites of yours. "the fish-eye lens of light years" is beautifully alliterated as well. :heart:
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
:floating: I'm honored by these shared words, and the fave you've bestowed, sweet one.
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vespera Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Only the tundra of planets
with equators untouched
by their inner engines 

:heart: this is just wonderful!
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
:blushes: Thank you so much, Raquel! Little Pixel Heart 
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vespera Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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kabloona Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
One of you better poems.
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013

I'd believe that if you had read all my poems. wink :P 

 

Anyway, thanks very much for stopping by, and for the fave.

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spoems Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013   Writer
There is excellent alignment between the visual elements and the metaphysical lament.  One of your better poems.
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
Thanks Shane, for the words, and for the fave.
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