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When time was young
and fish were wise,
a little boy would
guard the boats

his people used
for gathering food,
while their gods watched
over them from skies

that used to lie closer
to the water and the earth-
for this was the place
where the wind came to rest

and the sea would caress
the edge of the world,
and bless those who
trusted in the rhythm of

life, until the
cycle of death would
come and set them free-
to watch over

a little boy who
guarded the boats,
when time was young
and fish were wise.
A poem inspired by `foureyes's photo taken somewhere in China, "once upon a time..." [link]

Bernie, i hope you like it. :hug:

:bulletpurple: 8.26.12: Featured here! [link]

:bulletblue: 1.2.10: this poem has been chosen by the group #BlueMoonBird to be featured in its gallery. What an honor, and don't you just love the group's avatar.

:bulletred: 10.24.09: Bernie aka `foureyes is Grand Prize Winner in the National Geographic & Energizer Ultimate Photo Contest - and this photo used as the preview piece for my poem that I wrote especially for it, is one of two of his works that won first prize in their categories!
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jennystokes Featured By Owner May 19, 2015  Professional General Artist
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 19, 2015
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Writer
:+fav: Thank you once again. (Who am I fooling? There will [and are] more.)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
:hug: aw sweetheart, what are you thanking me for? It's I who thanks you for embracing my wordcraft, for the lovely support you show, and for faving this poem of mine that symbolized a turning point in my writing back when I didn't even know there was a lit community.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013   Writer
I had a bit of trouble finding the lit community too, but only because I have "senior moments." :lol:
You're like the avatar you use, at least in my mind and from what I read by you. :hug:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
ohhh what a lovely thing to say about my avi -- your thinking is definitely in the right direction. :hug:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   Writer
:iconwhewplz: Good!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous, Jade. :heart:
There's such a great feeling wrapped up in this.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
Thank you so very much, Rachel, for you sharing your thoughts, and for the fave as well. This poem was a turning point for me, so everyone who has responded in how it has touched them since (including Bernie, who's photo inspired me like it did), has been a true honor. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My absolute pleasure, Ms. Jade. :heart:
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful piece
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
I'm so glad you think so. :heart:
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This has been featured in my journal!

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
Thank you, that's so very lovely of you! :heart:
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jack0998 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
Very good poem!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
Thank you, I really appreciate that.
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BookWormMK Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this a lot.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
:iconbowplz: Thank you.
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BookWormMK Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome.
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k1mgy Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You've done it again.

I'm crying.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011
aww ;hug:
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Very interesting. A lovely piece. I love the repeating of the first stanza. Wonderful job.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011
Thank you so very much, that means a lot. ^.^
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011
You're welcome. :D
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katarthis Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. It's amazing what we use for inspiration, and how what inspires one of us comes back around to feed the soul of another. This is a very pretty piece.

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011
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It was a true inspiration or me - thank you so very much.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010   Writer
Good use of disenjambment. excellent flow and I like the symmetry of it all.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010
why thank you very much - I'm honored.
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Jade.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010
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somnomollior Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010   Writer
How lovely to see this poem again. I love it even more than I did before. Great to see it being honoured by McDermid.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2010
:aww: I'm most touched by your feelings about my humble piece - thank you, Cat. :heart:
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Hi Jade,

Not sure how the group thing works yet, so you may get this message twice.

A secondary function of my group #BlueMoonBird is for me to collect what I think are the best poems on DA. I wanted 'When' to be the first.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2010
gosh... :faint: thank you!
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Of course. You know how highly I think of your poem. :)

And thank you for accepting.
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lucidflux Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2009  Professional General Artist
This is so beautiful...I love how each stanza rests as its own statement about the time and the people who lived in it, and yet how dependent and flowing they are as a whole. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
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cberman Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2009
Beautiful. Captures the essence and atmosphere of the photo. Plays at a time, place, culture that is on the tip of the mind but cannot be summoned, unless put into words.

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2009
That's a thoughtful, lovely reading of my piece - thank you so much, and the fav'. :heart:
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