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while segmenting an orange
as I absent mindedly walk the garden

a waxing crescent moon ascends
for the third day in a row

racing the juice
that runs up my arms

my mind unchanging in spite of
the day's unrelenting heat

that has turned into night
and too warm to wear it down

faint light hooks the ends of
my hair at that moment

and how lovely the scent of rind
won't wash off of me for days
It started as a haiku of thoughtful sensation & observation, and wound up becoming a bit more, yet still simple.

7/21/11: I took out what punctuation there was - I realized it doesn't need it. I love paring it down to the bone the way it works best when writing Japanese short form which this piece is based on.
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i like =D
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
:iconbowplz: Thank you
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome ^^ this smiley is very cute
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Simple is good, a pleasent pause in my day.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
:blowkiss:
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
really amazing, so good at conveying the emotions
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
:love:
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riparii Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011
this is a perfect counterpart to the current summer heat wave.
A little mental refresher.
I agree the lack of punctuation streamlines it and further enhances
its graceful simplicity.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
Thank you, dear heart, for the lovely thoughts - that's exactly how I felt when I wrote it: as a mental refresher. <3
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somnomollior Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011   Writer
This is lovely in the ways that simple joys always are.
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