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I saw a young man today;
a photo of him kneeling
and draped in a flag

I found him online
and was struck by how
he looks like David

an uncle I never knew
but wish I could have-
to tell him I love him

intrigued with his looks
and how he reminds me
of me - a throwback;

dropped stitches in a quilt
the two of us,
mismatched of the family-

we don't look familiar
except to each other,
related by proxy

the first time I saw
his image, my bird voice
chirped, "He was so nice!"

how did I know?
with his black & white grin-
the pieces within me

kindred spirits throughout,
separated by generations
and bonded with scout pledges

I've always missed him
because I know him, but
he couldn't wait that long-

something went very wrong
long before I was born,
too late when time would sag

overturning his world,
the Pawtucket kid in a jeep
getting the news flash

it was ending- that they'd  
be sending him home, covered
in a freshly draped flag
The poem is about an uncle of mine who was killed in a freak accident in France at the end of WWll just before going back home to Rhode Island, and was inspired by this photo [link]

05/25/09: I'm terribly honored by Amber's feature of my poem in her journal - [link] :heart:

06/09/09: And yet another feature: [link]

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04/03/10: My mind went instantly reeling into writing this piece once I saw the image that I've posted the link to here in my author's comments. The piece is about an actual relative of mine, and the connection is deeply felt by me, especially because of how he met his fate during WWII. I would like to have your thoughts on how this bond comes across to you in the way I've expressed it. Your comments are greatly appreciated, thank you.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011   Writer
the first time I saw
his image, my bird voice
chirped, "He was so nice!"


hehe, i can hear it distinctly. touching piece.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
Thank you, Shane :heart:

(some time I'll tell you exactly what the ending means, if you wish)
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011   Writer
yes, please. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
see note
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Ravenwolfe0 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010
Beautiful

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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2010
Thank you very much. ^.^
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Ravenwolfe0 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2010
Your Welcome :D
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TheMaidenInBlack Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
:iconthewrittenrevolution:

This is quite different from your style, but it's lovely nonetheless. The words feel more personal, more...free, in a way. More natural, less refined.

The bond comes across exactly as you explain it. It really is a beautiful piece. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010
I've often said to others when it comes up - "I never knew I even had a style."

But yes, whenever I've written about things from my past, my childhood, feeling wistful as I go sentimental - I am indeed freer in my expressions.

Thank you so much for your input, dear one. :heart:
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TheMaidenInBlack Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010
Yes, I know what you mean. Sometimes people mention that to me too.. but I guess we do have one, as unconscious as it may be.

:hug: My pleasure!
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54viruses Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010
You almost made me cry with a slight smile on my face. Thank you for writing and posting this.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010
ah thank YOU for letting me know how my humble piece made you feel.
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AlwaysAnUnquietMind Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
Exquisitely written...
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
why thank you ^.^
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AlwaysAnUnquietMind Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
you're welcome
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010  Student Writer
This is a wonderful piece :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
thank you so very much, that means a lot :heart:
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010  Student Writer
you're most welcome (: :heart:
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Mahi-Fish Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009
I suspect that by the end of the weekend my favorites list will look like a curio shop with all sorts of wonderful pieces of Jade sprinkled throughout.
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Telios Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
many times I feel like your work is written about me even when its not, its what I really love about it, its not just well written stuff it feals real and hurts
it hits close to home
as I am sure it feels the same to others, its a beautifully painfull thing to feel that words are meant for you
on a deeper level than just being read or written
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2009
I find myself stumbling around for an answer to this.
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Sarkath Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009
Wow! I am honered you wrote this about a silly senior pic from three years ago now! Thank you so much! and sorry I didn't get to this until now, I have been really busy with training and work.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009
You're welcome - and it didn't seem silly to me - it's what it reminded me of. :)
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Mattiello Featured By Owner May 29, 2009  Professional Writer
It flows much more smoothly now, and I quite like it. :D


:heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
why thank you dear ...

and yes, I had shown it to you way too soon. I was still internalizing. The next night I was ready, and it flowed. I did wonder what you would think of it then, because it had my "voice" in sync, the way it is when I don't rush and just let it happen.

I'm very glad you like it now. :thanks:

:heart:
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Mattiello Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Professional Writer
You're very welcome.


:rose:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 31, 2009
oh nooo - not the summarily-given red rose! :noes:
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Mattiello Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2009  Professional Writer
:mwahaha: Oh Yis!
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
oh my god that was beautiful
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
:blushes: why thank you so very much
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moondrunk Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
for Memorial day?
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
The timing of this poem to the holiday was a coincidence, but after it was up I realized it could very well have been considered as such.
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
Very powerfully put.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
thank you awfully, dear Phil
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AdrienneLMalohne Featured By Owner May 25, 2009   Writer
Hay Jade Great job once again. Long time no talk, How is everything. is everything healing from your surgery?. Have a wonderful est of your day.
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AGMeade Featured By Owner May 24, 2009   Writer
I got chills as I was reading this. The connection, the knowing that this could have been someone very special.

Beautiful work, Jade.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
The way you have taken in this piece has in turn given me chills because it means alot when a reader can come into the world my words create, and feel them as I feel them.

Thank you so very much, dear Amber.
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
This is wonderful, Jade! The sense of connection through the years is palpable. Your words make me wish I had known your uncle, too.

:heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
Thank you so much, dear John - you know how well you have internalized what goes on in this piece - even moreso since we talked. It makes me emotional with gratitude.

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somnomollior Featured By Owner May 24, 2009   Writer
You weave a very strong and convincing tale simply and directly which at the same manages to be elegantly poetic.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
In spite of you having been under the weather, you gift me with your always clear, direct, and positive comments to help lift both reader & author just a little higher for an even better look. :heart:
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somnomollior Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
Thank you for your lovely words!
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
"Dropped stitches in a quilt" "Kindred spirits"
This piece resonates with emotional power. :heart:

One not based on bared hormonal urges or sharply focused angst, it taps a deeper pool... The sublime longing for meaningful relationship. :love:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
...meaningful, even between the space of future's past :heart:
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