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Aphrodite

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From the very moment my eyes beheld thee,
Full adorned, head to toe, with shells shimmering
Was when the sun and I first rose from the sea
And yet, apparition of time glimmering,
You stepped in the surf and came naked to me;
I, who's darkly ephemeral murmuring
Would by exposure thus mockingly decree,
But it was you became my Aphrodite.

This is the Italian poetic form of Ottava Rima (in this case, observing 11 syllables per line).

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So many times, when attempting to observe pentameter, I've wished that I could just have one more syllable to work work with. I'm glad to know that there is a form that caters to that cherished 11th syllable. To be honest, it would just leave me thirsting for a twelfth. It's probably impossible to make poets happy. :)

I don't think meter is restrictive though. It can be creatively liberating because it forces the writer to think about new ways to say things. This poems flows very well, and I like the imagery of it. I can't give an informed critique, because the form is new to me and I don't know its conventions. As general poetry this is certainly successful though. Thank you for sharing it.